一節高三作文練習講評課(新課標版高三英語教案教學設計)

第一節:情景作文(滿分20分)

某英文報“健康生活”欄目正在討論有關健康食品、體育鍛煉與少年兒童肥胖的問題。下面六幅圖畫是李明一年中的變化，請根據李明的情況寫一篇短文。

注意：1．詞數不少於60。 2．短文的開頭已給出。

提示詞語：junk food好吃但不利於健康的食品 snacks各種零食

A healthy diet and regular exercise may help to prevent obesity(肥胖) among children. Take Li Ming for example.

Li Ming used to be a healthy boy, but

第二節:開放作文(滿分15分)

根據下面英文提示寫一篇短文，詞數不少於50。

Traffic jams are a very serious problem in Beijing. The streets are full of cars,buses, and bikes almost every day. To make matters worse, some people do not follow the traffic rules.

Suppose you are discussing this problem in your English class. Please make two or three suggestions on how to improve the traffic in Beijing.

2005北京春季考試試題（作文評析）

情景作文（讀黑體字，想想如何寫更恰當）

1.A healthy diet and regular exercise may help to prevent obesity among children. Take Li Ming for example.

Li Ming used to be a healthy boy, but he has become a fat boy sine last year, or in Ming ate a lot of junk food on July, 2003. The next month, he went on to eat all kinds of snacks and he even watched TV while ate those snacks. On December, Li Ming became too fat to go the steps easily. In 2004, Li Ming changed his life habits. He ate normal food every day. Besides these, he took part in many sports, such as football, swimming, running and skating. To be surprised, now Li Ming succeeds in preventing obesity and he becomes a healthy boy again. 13

… he didn’t care about his diet. In the year 2003, he eat luck food and snacks from July to December . So he became obesity . When he found the fact that he was so fat , he began to limit himself . He had a healthy diet and did regular exercise in the next year . After a while , he turn back the healthy and thin body before tells us that a healthy diet and regular exercise may help to prevent obesity among children . (12)

（79 words）字數少，時態應該一致。

Ming used to be a healthy boy , but big changes had taken place in 2003. During the year , Li Ming was addicted in junk food , which tastes good but does harm to body . In the summer holiday, he not only ate a lot of junk food , but also didn’t take exercise . As a result, he soon became fat over the three months . In 2004, however, Li Ming realized that the fat body and had habits had brought a lot of trouble to him , so he decided to change it . He started to eat regularly and do exercise. For example , playing football afterschool , running in the morning , swimming in the summer and skating in the winter his effort , he had a good health again .

This story told us that : If you want to have a strong body , a good habit of eating and doing exercise is the first demand. (16.)

4. He became very fat in 2003. Let’s have a look at his daily life. From June to December he often eat a lot of junk food which taste good but is very bad for health. What’s more, he usually watched TV on sofa with eating snacks and went to sleep after watching TV. As the bad habit developing, he was more and more fat. However, what was the most surprised that he lost a lot and very healthy in sercert of it is close to his regular diet and a plenty of exercise, such as, playing football, swimming, running, skating and so on. So he is happy to go to school how. (15)

Ming used to be a healthy boy, but great changes have taken place in 2003 and 2004. The meal Li Ming ate every day was full of a lot of and different junk food which was bad for health. What’s more, he watched TV lying on the sofa and eating snacks. As a result, his weight went up day after day, he even had difficulties in climbing the stairs. This made Li Ming so sad that he decided to get a new beginning in 2004. Instead of junk food and snacks, Li Ming ate the healthy diet and took more exercises such as football, swimming, skating and running. At fast, he became as healthy as before, healthy diet and regular exercise helped him a lot. (17)

Ming used to be a healthy boy , but when he became enjoying eat junk food and snacks . Things became more and more terrible . He ate fast food and snacks every day and watched TV lying on the sofa. For about two months, he was so fat that he could hardly clamb the steps . Because of this, he decided to lose weight, he didn’t eat fast food any more and liked eating vegetables and fruits. He took exercises every day , such as playing football ming ing ing and so on .（標點符號） Finally , he was succeed , he became healthy and strong .16

開放作文（讀黑體字，想想如何寫更恰當）

discussing is depends on the question. In my opinion, people in Beijing should often take buses instead private cars. Then, I suggest that people there should follow the traffic rules in order to keep the traffic well. What’s more, we should think something more about others. In all, traffic relates to everyone and we should keep the traffic well. 10

2.I have three suggestions on how to improve the traffic in Beijing. First, I think our country should build more wild roads because there are so a few roads that the strects are full of cars, buses and bikes. Second, our country should limit the numbers of the cars and buses and they are pollution. The last one, our country can increase the number of the traffic policeman to make people follow the traffic rules. I think the three suggestions are the first we can do. 13

class hare a heated discussion about how to improve the traffic in Beijing. We had made two suggestion; One, the government should build more road for cars and bikes. If can make the matter better than before. Two, making people to follow the traffic rules, it must be raised in education. There are many means I believe the traffic jams should be solved. 11

t, we can enwide the old streets and build more new roads. And then, we can have the people who do not follow the traffic rules see the film in which many people lost their life because of breaking traffic rules. Finally, we should learn more about the traffic rules to make Beijing’s traffic better. (10)

t of all, everyone should abbey the traffic rules. If we follow the rules, less accidents will happen and more time will be saved on the road. Then, the government should plan to build more streets and widen the roads. There are more people than before, so the facdities should also be improved. As students, we should do first and set a modle to others. 11

6.I think we can decrease the number of the cars owned personality .. Then , make the road wider than before . (4) (字數不夠，語言貧乏，銜接性差)

fic jams are a very serious problems in Beijing . One reason is that some people don’t follow the traffic rules . It is terrible . We can let them have a lesson about the harm of the traffic jams. Maybe they will realized the disadvantages of not following the rules.

The streets are full of cars , buses and bikes every day . Maybe the government can persuade citizens to walk to schools or jobs.

(5) 沒有審清題目，重點不是原因而是解決方法。（答非所問）

8.I think our students should join the line to improve the traffic in Beijing. First, we should help policeman to built some traffic jams. Second, when we see some old people is walking across a road, we should help them to pass it. If we have enough ablitives, we should help policeman to wave the trafficts. 3分(跑題作文)

t of all, the government must improve the people’s knowledge of traffic rules by teaching and having an examination. This is the foundation. Second , The most important thing is that the people should obey the traffic rules and set up more traffic lights and bridge on the road. We should pay attention to safety. Finally we hope that the company should change the time of going to work and going home to avoid the rush hours. 12

10.I think that the government should make people know the knowledge of traffic and tell them to go to work by bus or by bike as possible. And They should build more roads for the cars . The most important thing is : if all the people follow the traffic rules , it will not have traffic jams. 12

注意下列單詞的拼寫，拿起筆來重新寫

1．作為什麼結果 2、限制 3、增加體重 4、習慣 5現代的6、方便的 7、解決 8、躺，（過去時，過去分詞）9、放 10、重要的11、代替 12進行體育鍛煉 13、吃（過去式，過去分詞）14、越來越胖 15 八月 16、食物 17、私人的

17游泳 18.意識到 19幸運的 20 決定去做什麼

21、健康的名詞和形容詞 traffic jams junk ---luck